Monday, 16 March 2015

Show don't tell





WALT: describe a feeling rather than saying one word.

Here is an example:
Nervous
As I waited in the queue, my stomach started to flutter


Now it is your turn …
terrified
The rain was thundering loudly and the hail was plummeting to the ground like volcano rocks falling during an enormous volcano eruption and I was dreading walking back to school.
relieved
I wiped my brow as the boat began to lift up As it nearly capsized over.
proud
I stood straightly on top of the sailing boat after making it come nicely up after I had capsized the boat.
nervous
Butterflies fluttered around and around in my tummy and my legs where shaking uncontrollably as I stood in the line about to ride on the Sailing boat for the first time of 2015.
happy
By heart lifted and sunlight lit up my whole body and a big smile appeared across my face as I sailed swiftly across the water.  

1 comment:

  1. Wow. You have a really good mind Stella.
    Ella

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